Six Sentence Sunday 6/6

This is week six of an excerpt between Emily and Riley from Bonded in Exile. If everyone’s loving it and wants me to continue a few more weeks, please, let me know. Thanks for reading and leaving you comments 🙂

As much as Emily didn’t want to believe him, Riley’s words stung with the bitterness of betrayal. She’d heard Silas talking to someone down on the dock…“Fuck, it’s not like I volunteered for this shit,” that’s what he’d said.

With every word, Riley’s grip on her throat tightened, matched only by the gripping pain inside her heart. She couldn’t answer him, even if she wanted to, because that would require breathing.

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10 responses

  1. mirriamsmyth

    Evocative six, Melynda. I’d love to read more, to see if she listens to Riley or trusts Silas. Well written six 🙂

    December 11, 2011 at 10:35 am

  2. Tension packed six. I’d like to read more of this.

    December 11, 2011 at 11:16 am

  3. Monica Enderle Pierce

    I love the duality of the last line. Is it the chokehold or is she choking on reality? Or both. Nice!

    December 11, 2011 at 12:38 pm

  4. Wow, that’s INTENSE! And of course you should keep going, silly! I love this!

    December 11, 2011 at 1:05 pm

  5. Some real nice emotion in this six. very good.

    December 11, 2011 at 1:08 pm

  6. Great tension! I could feel her emotion too!

    December 11, 2011 at 2:57 pm

  7. I can sense that bitterness throughout the scene. The betrayal is so ugly she seems not to care that Riley is choking the life out of her. Intense six. Yes, please keep going!

    December 11, 2011 at 6:13 pm

  8. Alix Cameron

    Love it! Great work.

    December 11, 2011 at 7:29 pm

  9. very intense. Keep writing adn we’ll keep reading.

    December 12, 2011 at 7:57 am

  10. Poor thing. I hope she kicks him in the ***manhood*** so he doesn’t strangle her!

    December 12, 2011 at 8:01 pm

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