Sweet Saturday Sample #2

This Saturday is a continuation from Until Darkness Comes. Last week Elias made a brief but powerful appearance. This week, Liam grapples with Elias’s death, and is forced to make a decision that will alter his world forever.  Thanks for reading my Sweet Saturday Sample. I hope you’re enjoying it and would love to read your comments 🙂

Liam marched up the jewel-encrusted steps of the High Court. His muscles ached with tension, his conscience heavy with guilt. He shouldn’t have let Elias put him off, he should have insisted on going with him. His scowl deepened, unable to hide his displeasure as he prepared to speak before the High Court. Nothing good ever came from falling under the notice of the elders, and this time would be no exception.

He came with news—none of it good. He’d run out of options, and time. The only move left at this point, was to petition the court for the freedom to cross dimensional borders. It was unheard of, but then again so was a warrior serving as a guardian. So many lines had already been crossed with this assignment, what’s a few more?

“Hey, Liam…”

Liam turned to see his best friend hustling up the stairs to catch him. He stretched his wings, trying to ease the unrelenting ache and tucked them behind his back.  “Balen,” he greeted, pulling the door open and holding it for his friend to pass through.

“I heard you’re speaking before the elders today. It must be pretty important business for you to request an audience with them. I know how much you love going to court.”

“Yeah, it’s pretty bad.”

“That’s what I thought. You know you could have filled a brother in. Anyway, whatever happens in there, you know I got your back, right?”

He nodded. “Thanks. I hope you’re still saying that fifteen minutes from now.”

As they walked down the hall, each echoing step steeled his determination. This was the right decision—the only decision. He already failed Elias, and he’d be damned if he was going to fail Olivia too.

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8 responses

  1. i want more

    October 22, 2011 at 5:41 am

  2. Jennifer Lowery~Writer

    That is one determined man! Great sample!

    October 22, 2011 at 7:48 am

  3. Sue

    so many lines have been broken…. and wings….. definately intriguing concept

    October 22, 2011 at 9:44 am

  4. I love the tension building here. The last paragraph really helps to emphasize it.

    October 22, 2011 at 1:34 pm

  5. I’d love to be a fly on the wall when he goes in to talk to the High Court! Will we? Want to read more!

    October 22, 2011 at 4:29 pm

  6. Lines crossed! An audience at Court! Intrigue! You’re got it all here, Melynda. Wonderful!

    October 22, 2011 at 7:32 pm

  7. I love all your descriptive details — jewel-encrusted steps, stretching and tucking his wings, echoing steps. Good writing.

    October 22, 2011 at 9:01 pm

  8. You do a great job of building the suspense and intrigue with this sample.

    October 23, 2011 at 6:47 am

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